Here is a sample of the new material going into book #3 to create manuscript 4 (MS4). A new chapter was created by carving some text out of a previous chapter and then adding new text. The text below is some of that new added text. The chapter is called "The Landscape of Time." Syon is a relatively new character introduced in the previous MS3 version. He is the future son of Stefan. His nickname is the "Child of Time." Although he does not have that many pages devoted to him, he has been a resounding favorite for some reason among recent early readers. Some kids have begged me to do a whole book on just him.
“I am going to do something that will help Atreyeu,” says Elof2.
“But it will be really scary for you. Your mom will probably be very angry when
she finds out I did this. Do you want me to do it?”
“Atreyeu knows what you are going to do and he says, ‘do
it,’” says Aleah.
“Oh, yeah, of course he does. So put your hands on my head
and see what I see.”
Aleah gives Elof2 a kiss on the cheek and puts her hands on
each side of his head. Elof2 already has one hand on the computer wall and he
closes his eyes.
He commands, “Tonya, execute program Jack in the Box.” Both
Aleah and he freeze, becoming statues; the room now looks like a Greek museum
containing alabaster statues and twisted by interwoven computer displays. The
silence and peace of the room hides the life or death tragedy being played out
in some virtual forum.
Syon floats at the
top of the room invisibly, watching over this turn in time. He sighs to
himself, “So many painful events, so much sadness inflicted upon you, dad. No
matter how many times I watch it, it always hurts for me to see it again. You were so happy and free—happy and free
until they made you preside over the building of your own prison. I wish I
could change it all. I wish, I wish, I wish…”
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